@kardyro: For both JP and EN not being your native tongue, you did a really great job, I would never have guessed it!
My only suggestions would be to not use "(LOL)" in dialogue, I get it from a stylistic perspective, but it just reads awkwardly. On the last page, "Now every year, you won't have to say something like, "I got nothing this year"" reads awful, like trying to juggle uneven weights. The point got across, but I tripped over myself getting there