thanks for the effort.
confusing/unnatural dialogue 2,2-3; 4,1-2; 12,3-4; 18,1; 22,1; 26,3-4; 27,4-5
overall flow of dialogue from 2 to 3 doesnt make sense
spelling 4,2; 5,1; 5,3; 9,1; 10,4; 11,3; 12,1; 15,2; 15,5; 16,1; 17,1; 21,3; 29,5; 31,2; 31,3; 31,6