Saikin Haitta Shiro Madoushi ga Party Crusher de, Ore no Isekai Boukensha Seikatsu ga Houkai ni Kiki na Ken ni Tsuite - Vol. 1 Ch. 6 - Party Crusher …

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Okay, because you asked I thought I'd give it a quick proofreading. Please don't let this discourage you I really enjoy your translations more than that other one

pg4 "cookings" should be "cooking" or "food"
pg7 "equipments" should be "equipment is the lifeline"
pg8 "we" should be "you"
pg9 about the challenge should be "That challenge of your's" or "challenge, havent I"
pg19 "I can borrow you" should be "I can lend you" though it should probably be "Take my" as that is more decisive than him asking her if she wants it.
pg20 "those who doesn't" should be "those that don't"
pg20 "been perhaps -> "perhaps been"
pg22 "return yet -> "return now"
pg23 "guards -> "guard"
pg23 "watch the flank" or "watch our flank"
pg24 "ranks" -> "rank"
pg24 "wears and tears equipment" -> "causes wear and tear to equipment" or just "damages equipment"
pg25 "on time" -> "in time"
pg28 "fine" -> "okay"
pg29 about falling "We fell quite a long distance" or "Whoo we fell pretty far"
pg29 about the layers "I didn't expect for us to be trapped in separate layers"
pg29 about learning "Could it have learned from previous attempts?"
pg30 "them" -> "those"

Your english is perfectly understandable but could be refined a bit. Please keep up the good work!
 
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