Sentouin, Hakenshimasu! - Vol. 1 Ch. 2

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Ah, had some decent potential from chapter 1 but this was just a giant mess. To bad.
 
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Women everywhere!! However, I don't particularly have high hope for this story to develop into a harem story.
 
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this would be alot better if it had smut tag in it so we could see some fucking... the story is literally trash
 
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Really struggled with this chapter. Verb tense, possessives, and agreement are all over the place. Very basic grammar mistakes. A proofreader would be nice. Even if the translation was improved though the this chapter was much worse. The introduction of lost tech seems superfluous and really rushed. The pacing is terrible. Combatant #6 has completely forgotten his frustration from the previous chapter. Snow's opinion of our protagonist seems to change every panel. Really nothing like the author's other series.
 

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Second chapter
What this
head hurt
english? no.
good god

Maybe someone who actually knows english should be consulted before releasing something like this. And by consulted I mean he should rewrite the entirety of the translation into something more intelligible.
 
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When someone complaint, I could only think of a game that they always blaming a tank or support for everything... Anyways, EXPlOSION is Everyones(?) Favorite quote ?
 
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@DarkDooM, @Fim, welcome to scans done by Loli Mamoritai, who has repeatedly refused people's offers to be editors/proofreaders for his work.
 
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The language went from bearable to absolute shit.
Not cool, Loli Mamoritai.
 

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