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Oh my.
This is pretty shit, isn't it?
- "I'm an avid romance novel reader from another world"
And now, we know that he's like 14yo, but his growth was crazily stunted by the curse and the treatment he received... but he will suddenly become bigger than her?!? That's not how the human body works.
I dunno, I kinda like the art of this, but maybe it's time to move on and put it where it belongs, in the "Dropped" pile with the rest of the trash... I don't need geniuses in my stories, but I don't like it when every bloody character is dumb as fuck.
This is pretty shit, isn't it?
- "I'm an avid romance novel reader from another world"
but she doesn't understand when someone tells her that her smile pangs his heart.
- "I'm a malnourished cursed recluse shunned by my family, even the maids treat me like crap"but he still get all high and mighty giving orders like a pampered noble kid when the story need him to.
- "We are both confused about his recent attitude"and BAM, curse becomes life-threatening to pretty much erase the awkwardness.
- "Oh my god, he's going to die from the curse now!"unless she releases her incredible OP power, the DEUS EX MACHINA!!!
And now, we know that he's like 14yo, but his growth was crazily stunted by the curse and the treatment he received... but he will suddenly become bigger than her?!? That's not how the human body works.
I dunno, I kinda like the art of this, but maybe it's time to move on and put it where it belongs, in the "Dropped" pile with the rest of the trash... I don't need geniuses in my stories, but I don't like it when every bloody character is dumb as fuck.