Sounds about right, I would use the phrase "What am I even doing" instead of "What am I doing" so it sounds more like a rhetorical question, to keep the original meaningPage 3 Panel 1, I know both mean I, but it better to just make it "I ... I(Male/M)" since usually this kind of thing will be important down the line in this kind of manga. Also Panel 2 probably "What am I doing?" is more correct than "what have you done?". Panel 3 "I can't help but feel angry at my own powerlessness." is probably more correct. Panel 4 "It's frustrating" or just "frustrating" is probably more correct when you look at all other panel than regret. CMIIW.
Imagine fighting like that while wearing high-heels... It would be too muchI don't get it, she's wearing a tiara, holding a sword, but she's barefoot?
What the heck?
But ... but ......Imagine fighting like that while wearing high-heels... It would be too much