First off, thanks for picking this up again.
As for translations goes, you are still learning but I see it going pretty well, can only improve from here.
One thing I will point out is the use of Spanish symbols(?) like the inverted ! which is not used in english, but in time you get the hang of it, I know it's hard to leave old habits.
Good luck in learning and translating this, take your time because I'm sure translating work is really a hard thing to do.