Wait this is actually a great start, excited to see where this will go. IMO it’ll either end up a train wreck or masterpiece by the end, interested to see which it is.
Also people, our dearest MC has already explained that he’s been on the verge of a major mental breakdown, or even complete collapse, for a while now, THEN he sees the girl he loves cut up into a ton of pieces right in front of him. You think he has the energy to understand and properly process things?
I have chronic fatigue syndrome and post concussive syndrome, which together somewhat resemble severe insomnia, and let me tell you, on bad days I completely fail to process anything other than what I’m focused on, and can’t even process my one focus well. People try to talk to me a lot but due to fatigue and headaches my brain fails to recognize it, or prioritizes other processes.