The Sorcerer King of Destruction and the Golem of the Barbarian Queen - Vol. 1 Ch. 6

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I see no reason why you should bash him lol.
You should bash Goltarou-kun for being a jealous g(irl)olem.
The guy is still an idiot with limited knowledge after all.
 
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Petition to change the title of this series to: My wife is mud and stone, but she hot af.
 
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I wish the protagonist was more aware of his companion's actions. First the monkeys that were massacred because they were called cute (golem girl was jealous), and now this? Most of the fighting (and one-sided massacre) were caused and initiated by her all the while the protagonist cheers her on unaware of the reason. F for those F cups that got F'd up.
 
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no more shoulder rides :(

@Lament If Gol-Tarou can changer her shape maybe she can make elastic like stone?
 
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To be fair the title does say barbarian queen and gol-chan certainly has that barbarian lifestyle nailed down. I mean, what's more barbarian than mercilessly wrecking a temple because you felt like it?
 
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Long list of things to nitpick over in hopes of a third revision being done
P5
gather -> gathered
eversince -> ever since
whale's -> "a whale's"
"touch the" -> "touch on the" script -> scrip
"the chance that this [SVE territory scrip] to be a" -> the chance of this [SVE territory scrip] being a"
depends -> depending
"time lag" -> "time gap"
"this banknotes" -> "these banknotes"
"only papers" -> "simply papers"

P6
"in the map" -> "on the map"

P8
breast -> breasts
freference -> preference

P10
Golem-tarou -> Gol-tarou
seems -> seem
"severing magical" -> "severing a magical"

P11
"There doesn't seems to be more way ahea-" -> At the very least, seems -> seem but the sentence is a bit rough regardless. Is he trying to say something like "There doesn't seem to be anywhere else to g-"? scares -> scared
constructed -> construct

P12
"this seemingly" -> "these seemingly"
"this clothes" -> "these clothes"

P13
"I was in a daze..." -> Either "I was in such a daze" or "making me unaware"
regreting -> regretting
"kept feeling strong stare from gol-tarou from behind me" -> "a strong stare", second from is redundant
"but since this happened just before that that" -> "but since that happened just before this,"
"that one place" -> "the one place"
armor -> armour (You used colour and coloured earlier so best to stick with the superior spelling elsewhere too)

P14
armor -> armour (as much as armour is the superior spelling, consistency is best)

P18
comrades -> comrade

P20
smashsshh -> smaaaaash
flame -> flare

P21
attendtion -> attention
"picked up" -> "picked a"

P26
"A sudden series of fierce rush attacks" -> "A sudden flurry of fierce blows"

P28
"at once" -> "right away" or "immediately"
order -> orders

P29
golem -> golems

P30
"this words" -> "the words"
 
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Anyone else feel like this should have had 'Pygmalion' in the name somewhere?
 
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@Riger No, because then it wouldn't follow the obligatory light novel trend that it has to have an insanely huge title that describes a lot of the story
 
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yey thanks for the chapter...

not gonna lie, i hate goltarou now... as well as the mc like how on earth did
he conclude that it was gol's imouto???
 

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