Tsuihou Suru Gawa no Monogatari - Vol. 1 Ch. 9 - Reflection

[2hu_ism]

Better leave out love story completely.
Best thing would have been to put banishment before story with just a short flashback scene at the beginning: Athena remembers her childhood friend (best without a face or name; there was absolutely no need for the story to make Est part of it because they behave as if he never existed in the first place) who she banished from the party for his own sake. She convinced him (in a friendly way) and he returned to their hometown. Nevertheless she misses him and sees that shes's lacking without him.
Now you have just to add an elf girl who's not just a hardcore lesbian yandere but has actual character traits and a Daru who behaves like a teacher and not like a harem king and you would have a readable story with likable characters.

yeah, that is also another way to make the plot smoother. I could give it benefir of doubt and say the lucky pervert moment scene is simply fan service but then the inner monolouge(is she this cute all along) insta ruins it all.

Comparedd to kaiser with his adopted daughters , the author set MC as always seeing them as daughters and nothing else even the daughter set an eyes on him so it didn't break his "father" character trait even we have fan service scene almost every chapter.

or if author really want romantic development between heroine and mentor then they shouldn't set heroine and banished in the first place. cuz it's just make reader can't root for them after they banish him.

there're several way to make it works but the author failed to pull it off. which is regretful since the premier of banisher PoV is interesting.

 

[YamiryuuZero]

Guess it's because it's supposed to be different from the usual banished stories. Thus they ignore the poor execution and the contradictions in the stories.
The only reason why Est isn't in the party at this moment is that Daru keeps silent about the misunderstanding. That's it. Otherwise they could talk things out, Est could reenter the party and Daru could still continue his training. But to keep the plot running Est (the victim) has to become evil guy and gets cuckolded more and more. The characters don't act according to their supposed personalities but according to their role.

• Athena: Although she banished Est because for her love for him (friendship) she doesn't try talking to him or understand his feelings (as his best friend she should have noticed the unnatural change in his behaviour) but gives up on him pretty fast. Instead she concentrates on becoming stronger (according to her role as heroine). Thus she appears pretty selfish and cold.
• Daru: He's the supposed MC who helps the party grow. Seems like the author intended him to be a kind person who acts like a teacher. The author should have stopped there. But have a look at his actions. He (I'm repeating myself) doesn't really try to clear up the misunderstanding between Est and Athena. Instead he gives his all to integrate a stranger into the party who offers her virginity in the process. You can see that he has the ability to convince stubborn people but he doesn't try with Est. Instead we get a lot of scenes putting him up as the love interest of the female party members (except for the lesbian elf but she could be convinced if Athena is included).
• Est: He is the banished one and becomes the biggest rival. He was a good guy who has been with the heroine all his life. But when he's betrayed by his party and his love he's turned into the evil guy (for the sake of the story). All we get is a "drunk on power", disregarding that he must be totally broken inside.

Most readers see these contradictions (thus the negative ratings) but some try to fill empty spots and ignore aforementioned facts for the sake of a story which is supposed to be different. They assume the authors intentions and ignore what is actually shown. I don't think that it's the reader's task to fix the author's mistakes. As it is, the manga (and the webnovel) are terrible and leave an extremely bad taste in one's mouth after reading.

This reminds me of the Mother, May I See Metroid: Other M dissertation on the TVTropes forums. Korval (the guy who wrote the dissertation) said that "a bad communicator might end up delivering the wrong message."

This is exactly what seems to be happening here - the author wants to deliver the message that Daru is the wise and experienced mentor, but he goes about it by making him ignore Est's lack of growth, not doing anything to prevent him from being expelled from the party, and only showing his amazing fighting and mentoring skills when the virginity of the girls he's interested in could be his.

Same thing for Athena expelling Est because the author wants us to believe she's caring for him when she didn't even try talking to him about anything before or after the incident, and Est himself, wanting us to believe he's become an evil asshole when he accidentally wrote the guy to be mentally scarred and in need of a hug the most.

This whole story is the author just not understanding what he is writing.

 

[KuzumaKazuma]

My guess is that some were early readers who dropped/stopped reading without changing their votes.

It was shit until the very end, actually, the level of shittiness was proportional to the value of the chapter number.

 

[TitanFiber]

These chapters are releasing too slow!! Very interested in how the story is going to progress. It highlights the realities of inexperience and uncontrollable ego. Building yourself up when you get knocked down is a much more valuable lesson than instant gratification from being OP.

 

[Kortez]

I'm calling it now, Est and Daru are the same person. I'm betting that Est went back in time somehow and is making the team stronger because of some future fight where his team died because they were weak.

 

[monkey123]

Why didn't he take her virginity?!