I'll have to be honest, this is pretty rough.
Some notes for improving:
p5 - Kawano is either talking about the girl or her breasts, should be "she" or "they", not "he"
p7 - is only Kate's sister (Karly) well known? "The sisters" or "the Umihara sisters" is probably a better fit.
p11 - Niko is the only one studying, should she really be saying "we"?
p12 - Same thing with Niko using "we".
p14 - it should be paisen, the same letters as senpai
These were the most obvious points to me, as far as fixes go. That said, there are plenty of other places in the chapter that are unclear. Just those other spots lack context for me to say what to fix, as someone who doesn't speak Japanese and hasn't read the original.
Of course, that is with the benefit of the doubt. This honestly looks a lot like an AI translation. :/. But if it isn't, at least you can learn!
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Also Kawano deserved thatnotwd
I'll have to be honest, this is pretty rough.
Some notes for improving:
p5 - Kawano is either talking about the girl or her breasts, should be "she" or "they", not "he"
p7 - is only Kate's sister (Karly) well known? "The sisters" or "the Umihara sisters" is probably a better fit.
p11 - Niko is the only one studying, should she really be saying "we"?
p12 - Same thing with Niko using "we".
p14 - it should be paisen, the same letters as senpai
These were the most obvious points to me, as far as fixes go. That said, there are plenty of other places in the chapter that are unclear. Just those other spots lack context for me to say what to fix, as someone who doesn't speak Japanese and hasn't read the original.
Of course, that is with the benefit of the doubt. This honestly looks a lot like an AI translation. :/. But if it isn't, at least you can learn!
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Also Kawano deserved that
Noted thanks for the feedback