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The WIP paper is, of course, WIP. It'll end up being 10 pages. I'll probably end up cutting the intro down significantly as I try to squeeze the Phanariot golden age and the Greek revolution to the page limit.Sorry for being late.
First up, it was an interesting read and I had no problem following its contents. Just as @Angry_Panda has said however the beginning (first page) is a rather slow start and could use some work but you already know that, so nothing new. Everything else is fine and you seem to know what you are writing about (seems trivial, I know but there are other cases out there).
Also well written and structured. Your passion for this topic is infectious and in turn interests me in something I didn't even know existed (=it was good).
One minor nitpick:
I am not really a fan of these sentences (that I underlined). They stand out like inkspots on a white sheet of paper and break away from the scientific writing from before and after. I would just delete it and go directly to the next sentence like this (by the way, small typo spotted):
This aside, both the draft and paper were well made, besides the minor things already mentioned.![]()
For that spelling discrepancy, one is the Greek (also Albanian?) translation anglicized poorly (and therefore incorrect) and the other is the name that foreign experts gave the site (which could be argued as correct but isn't historically accurate).
I have no idea why I did that.
and technically both are incorrect, it should be skoúpoi.
