Koji Onna ni Natta Tote - Vol. 1 Ch. 3.5 - Extra

[MangaDex]

 

[m6n]

Another one! Please tell me if you see any errors or typos so I can fix them.

 

[ikinetsu]

pg 5 Bro, you know you did more than just look!

 

[ale_city]

Another one! Please tell me if you see any errors or typos so I can fix them.

on page 4 I think "So these are a woman's..." over "so this is a woman's..." would be better. Isn't he talking about his boobs? I don't know japanese so I'm not entirely sure, "this is a woman's..." could work if it's about "chest" but for some reason the singular doesn't strike the same message when the sentence's subject is omitted.
This is merely my opinion on dialogue clarity but unsure if there's nuances I'm missing from not knowing the original. Thank you again for the translation, I not only welcome it but like your attitude asking for feedback openly.

 

[llxUnknownxll]

Personally, I think leaving it as "So this is a woman's..." is fine because of the ambiguity. "These are a woman's..." only implies breasts, whereas "This is a woman's..." can be taken to mean "This is a woman's chest", "This is a woman's pair of tits", or "This is a woman's (naked) body..." Considering that the next panels are her realizing that it's her body "...But this is my own body!" and her enjoying the full view of her body and not just her breasts, the full body interpretation could be better than focusing entirely on the boobs.

As for the original grammar, Japanese is fairly vague when it comes to plurality so the original これが女の can be translated to both "This is..." and "These are..." depending on the context. There is a more explicitly plural これら for "these" but I don't think I've really seen the plural これら used with おっぱい. But without the full context of the subject, これが usually gets translated as the singular "This is..."

Honestly though, I think either one would be good enough. It just really depends on what the reader thinks comes next in that unfinished sentence.

 

[tardio]

Another one! Please tell me if you see any errors or typos so I can fix them.

I saw you mention wanting to clean/redraw for text over the drawing and I have experience with that. I’m really enjoying the manga and your translation and would love to contribute if your interested. My discord username is ezrathenine if you want to reach out.