Huh. Translation appears to be better, or more… polished. Like, page 17, where she compares him to a fish, and he complains she’s just roasting him. Dunno if that was an accidental pun (the other translation had him complain she’s insulting him), or if there’s one in Japanese, but it’s funny. Or how on page 24 it’s a proper description of the onigiri ingredients, not just onigiri.
A few things:
What’s the name difference, Yoyomiya / Yoimiya? Both sound off (never learned moon speak, just off my vibe; might simply be artist name though).
Page 12, panel 12: cost = cause
Page 13, panel 4: crochetta = crocetta (assuming the band name from page 4 flyer is correct9
Page 14, panel 4: president
And oh look, a new chapter!