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Isekai vs reality:
Isekai:
MC: "In the end you are still a girl."
HeroGirl: "Well thank you for worrying about me. That's a first. (Eventhough I'm 16.)"

Reality:
MC: "In the end you are still a girl."
Girl: "What did you just say?"

Most sentences with the structure of "In the end you are still a ..." don't end being NOT offensive.

@reaperinu: I also don't think it was that bad. I have enjoyed reading this chapter.

@ Orcs: Still saying they still would be rather popular with mankind (and elvenkind) (as long as they stay in certain niches).
 
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Thanks, but no thanks.

Please work on your translations and typesetting.
 
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Thanks for the chapters! (although the translation and typesetting could use a little work, I guess. Not like I'm an expert on the subject either)
 
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I'm starting to think this protagonist likes to get raped by orcs, be it from male or female ones.
 
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@reaperinu It's mostly just wording. If you want examples for future reference here are the things I found
From the first six pages:
Page 2: Maybe because they're using a different kind of fertilizer. Lacks an article, different kind of fertilizer is in singular, with the fertilizer being the subject, which requires an article (a, an, the)
Eh, where is thatthe boy? The boy would imply that the subject was never part of the conversation with the speaker

Page 5: That's why I wanted to ask you. Since the action was already done, the past tense should have been used, rather than present
Can you give the quest that I already took taken to someone else. Taken is in past participle, which can only be used in specific instances.

Page 6: This is a monster hunting quest. Needs an article since quest is singular
I'm actually doing these this kind of quests. The two or three times implies that quest should be in plural
I don't didn't even realize. Past events use didn't, don't is used for present or future events
Fully control Ouroboros's dragon power. Possessive. Needs an apostrophe
If that is the case then please take care. The rule of thumb is that most sentences have verbs, if there is no action verb, then a linking verb should be somewhere

Oh, and good luck on your study of the language.
 
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It's just too bad that at page 9, the joke/reference isn't properly translated as the orc said "Yaranaika" (if you see the joke, otherwise, just google it).
 
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Of course Al really attracts the orcs to himself.
This is the second time it happens, I would start asking myself two questions in him. 😆
 
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He's staying in an inn instead of at his parent's house?
Also the english is kinda stilted
 
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seriously this 2 chaps needs a better typsetter. Left align looks wierd.
Also needs edits and proof reading.
 
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Yikes. So many "apprentice marks" on these last two chapters by the unknown. 😣
 
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I normally like fast-paced stories, but this manga is just all over the place. They just keep throwing new stuff into the story without actually resolving or building upon anything. Even farming, the main premise of this whole thing, hasn't really been touched on since he was given that plot of land in chap 2, which he has done nothing with so far.

Edit: Also, why does it seem like he doesn't even recognize his own house?? Don't throw in a random visit to the family and make it look like such a big deal, without even a bit of foreshadowing or backstory as to why he left in the first place. I bet there will be some huge family reveal out of nowhere next chapter.
 
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@versub with a mother that can make him vomit blood just from being hugged, I think he has his own safety in mind
 
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It seems like badass stats are the norm. A weak girl nearly kills him with a stab and now a house wife nearly hugs him to death.
 
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Mother's tackle: Ignore defense and deals damage relative to 95% of the son's life + stun.
 

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