A Normally Dowdy Man Is in Essence the Mightiest War-God - Ch. 3

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If I’m being honest the grammar is kind of terrible, it’s a little out of order in spots so I have to re-read sentences occasionally. But thanks for the work, don’t mean to sound like I’m complaining, I mean it more as constructive criticism.
 
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Compared to last chapter this is a great improvement. Which is a bit odd since 0 and 1 were fine, 2 was atrocious, and 3 is fine. There are a couple moments that maybe needed a bit of clarification (was the young girl saying she wants to date and marry our MC?) but overall much better. Nice work.
 
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I've seen it in two chapters now there's always someone that looks like the shield hero.
 
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I really like the art, especially the character designs of the girls, reminds me a little of Gensou Gourmet. Now, if it just was paired with a good writer, perhaps it's just the manga adaptation mangling the source but so far the writing here doesn't exactly inspire hope...
 

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