It flows well, makes sense, isn’t confusing.... I can’t imagine you’re far off the mark!! You’re doing great! Thanks so much for the chapter!!
I’m starting to feel bad for Iris T_T I hope Mildred realizes soon that she doesn’t need to give Ashley special treatment just cause she’s “Cinderella”! Treating them equally and giving Iris her right to be introduced first as seniority dictates would be so much better... Iris is so smart and wonderful! She deserves better than this!!!