ABYSMAL - Ch. 1

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Gonna read this because the art reminds me of aoibahn and because I'm genuinely confused on what's going on and need answers
 
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The art is really really good, but having some announcer character come out of nowhere to spit exposition at the reader made me lose interest really quickly. It sucks because I feel like the world building up to that page was written in very well.
 
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The art is really really good, but having some announcer character come out of nowhere to spit exposition at the reader made me lose interest really quickly. It sucks because I feel like the world building up to that page was written in very well.
The announcer didn't reveal much besides the 4 rival factions. Like 3 pages? Out of how many?
 
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The announcer didn't reveal much besides the 4 rival factions. Like 3 pages? Out of how many?
One page of poorly introduced exposition dumping is bad enough. its actually 7 pages of exposition, slightly spaced out by action, but it's incredibly jarring. The chapter could be 1 million pages long, exposition dumping still sucks if it isn't done with a lot of care.

Plus, the announcer literally introduced the entire world that they live in and explained the different types of humanoids that live in it as well as what the different factions are after. That's a lot of stuff to go over in such a careless fashion.

I'm just saying that if you can immediately recognize "the author wants to explain to the audience how their world works right now with almost no set-up", then it's not a good exposition dump.
 

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