I really wanted to like this story, I really did. With every scroll, I was hoping that it would get better and make more sense, but I was wrong. The story has little to no depth, the character's feelings lack impact, they're pretty much 1 dimensional and a cliche of similar stories I've read before. The art is beautiful and I thought that it would make up for the lack of skill in the storytelling and bad dialogues, but it didn't. The story has a bad flow. From telling us of how she woke up as the villain of the novel to telling us of how Edgar could read people's thoughts but not hers, to how she was trying to build a friendship with him that didn't make any sense whatsoever since it was so obviously one-sided, to him suddenly being jealous in the next chapter because of Aaron and her engagement made NO sense to me. Like it's obvious he doesn't like her, but then he suddenly likes her. They didn't even show us how that happened. Plus, the story tells you more than it shows you. The time frame skips are strange and some of the information they dump onto us are also pretty overwhelming. The flashbacks are horribIy delivered too. I didn't get the bit that she was also befriending Alice through letters until chapter 10 or something. I didn't even understand the bit where she suddenly got engaged to Aaron, or why and how that happened. Or why Edgar suddenly loves her even though he doesn't? Honestly, I can't feel sympathetic towards any of the characters, because as I said, they're one dimensional. Edgar is meant to be the main lead, but he's so unlikable. I mean he's meant to be a villain...but still, give us something to make us like him! The main girl isn't very interesting wither. She's very bland. The only characters I can root for would be Aaron and Alice but it's frustrating how the writer reveals stuff. One second Aaron is telling Duroa that his 'love' is dead, then we see his POV and he knows she's alive and he's avoiding her. Why? The drama is unecessary and the writer doesn't give you believable ground to...believe it, you know? Also, another thing I noticed was how the story is obviously situated in a Western historical period, yet the way the characters speak and engage with each other does not fit the setting. So all in all, I'd say this story had potential but it's not working. The romantic part of it doesn't work. The 'magical' fantasy characteristics don't belong in it and don't flow. The historical part isn't even remotely accurate. The characters are not likable enough and there's nothing to it that stands out. I was disappointed. I usually don't give such bad reviews or even criticise writers much, I read these as a hobby and I mean to keep it light-hearted and fun, but this story really got me frustrated in more ways than one and I had to dump my thoughts somewhere and just let them out. Thank you for hearing me out.
If you're planning on reading this...don't do it if you have any rational brain cells left. But if you're planning to get confused and frustrated with a badly delivered story...jump right in!