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page 2 "what took you?"
i think it should be: "what took you
so long?"
page 4 "we want to gaze upon them and
hope!"
it's just fine on its own, they can "hope" to have such breasts but then nonoha says "but chidori hates it when you
grope her" and later "so...don't
touch her or stare (...)" so in that context it feels like it should be "grope" not "hope"
there is also that "what took you?" repeated later so maybe translator just wanted to shorten it but it just sounds odd to me said like that
these are ones i remembered now
but, im terrible at writing, gramma and such stuff and english isn't even my first language so i may be wrong