Hoshihimemura no Naishobanashi - Vol. 1 Ch. 3 - The perks of a coward

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He really needs to just sit all them down and explain sex and that you should wait till you marry someone before you play with that part on someone else.
 
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We're all going to hell for reading this. But at least I'll die happy.
 
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Everyone's going on about the lewdness and I'm just wondering about the odd choice of font an capitalization.
 
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Pg 4 has a super awkward sentence

"My parents too went to...."

Try this instead

"My parents went to live in the city too, so it's just been me and grandma all this time"

also, please ditch the all caps font.
 

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