@plastic_sludge
I'm writing this down not as a critique of the scan, but to help you out.
Page 3 "The other Dibel House's supported" > "The Other Dibel House's supporters" - Typo? Incorrect use of the word?
Page 5 "I'm sure the opportunistic nobles who supported have already" > "I'm sure the opportunistic nobles who supported them have already" -Missing object for the verb "supported". Supported who?
Page 5 "Once they stepped into a duel, the only outcomes for them is either victory or death" > "Once they step into a duel, the only outcome for them is either victory or death" - Wrong combination of tenses.
Plus a few other iffy grammar that can be improved, or clunky dialogue that could've been written better. For example, Page 6, nobody ever says "enough as a reason". Just drop the "as a" and fix the flow of the other parts of that sentence, which is also clunky.
I feel that for someone fluent in English, typos are less of a sin than badly constructed sentences. It can be REALLY jarring. I can overlook most typos and tense issues, but bad sentences really grate my mind's "ear". This scan isn't that bad personally, but I'm just trying to emphasize how important it is.
I just scanned a few pages, or remembered the ones that really stood out, so there may be more I missed.