Isekai Kenkokuki - Vol. 6 Ch. 43.1

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you feel bad for the guys who raped tons of women and pillaged the fuck out of their own people?
 
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I'm writing this down not as a critique of the scan, but to help you out.

Page 3 "The other Dibel House's supported" > "The Other Dibel House's supporters" - Typo? Incorrect use of the word?
Page 5 "I'm sure the opportunistic nobles who supported have already" > "I'm sure the opportunistic nobles who supported them have already" -Missing object for the verb "supported". Supported who?
Page 5 "Once they stepped into a duel, the only outcomes for them is either victory or death" > "Once they step into a duel, the only outcome for them is either victory or death" - Wrong combination of tenses.

Plus a few other iffy grammar that can be improved, or clunky dialogue that could've been written better. For example, Page 6, nobody ever says "enough as a reason". Just drop the "as a" and fix the flow of the other parts of that sentence, which is also clunky.

I feel that for someone fluent in English, typos are less of a sin than badly constructed sentences. It can be REALLY jarring. I can overlook most typos and tense issues, but bad sentences really grate my mind's "ear". This scan isn't that bad personally, but I'm just trying to emphasize how important it is.

I just scanned a few pages, or remembered the ones that really stood out, so there may be more I missed.
 
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It's amazing. Do you guys prefer release 2 chapter/2 month or 1 chapter/month ? Yeah whatever our choice is, we can't make such a demand
 
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It seemed weird at first, but now that I think about it it's probably because not all of them are like that. Not everyone in their faction is as immoral as Dibel and that other guy. The royal family was actually on the fence on which to support - they already had their princess engaged to Rigar and might have fully supported Dibel if Almus underperformed.

Almus, instead of expressing animosity to the Dibel supporters like he does with Rigar, hopes that those supporters join the Ash family instead.
 
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The story gets better and better...
I hope almus already created another version of chocolates to present to his 2 wives...
 

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I find it funny how they keep bringing out names like Einz, or whoever. Then attach the face to a word bubble probably hoping that we would remember who that person is.

but I remember nothing.
 
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you can't do any decent worldbuilding without talking about the world
 
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The raw says "かわいそうにディベル家支持派も立つ瀬がないな" and when run through Google translate, reads "Poor Divel supporters have no way to stand".
So this means "supporters of Dibel house", not "the other houses that Dibel supports".

Besides, it won't make sense for those who are supported by the Dibel house to be ashamed or to be pitied. They would have been simply disappointed instead.

I don't know where TL got "other" from. There's no "他の" in those exact speech bubbles.
 

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