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Can I give an opinion for what I think could have been a better plot point for this chapter?
I would have changed the fate of the husband from dying to being one who ran off. I feel that has a stronger reasoning for why the mom is a bit cautious on approaching a new relationship and having some trust issues with our mc. Also for future plot points on whether the husband would return and her having to pick between him and the mc. I feel that gives a more compelling narrative than him just being dead and her having some lingering loyalty to him. Yeah it's a Ok plot point and all but I feel it doesn't really give our mc any big obstacle to overcome, unlike if the husband was a bum then it would make sense since this manga is trying to show how the mc is trying to mature in order to prove his love for the mother and that he is worthy to take care of her and her son.
I would have changed the fate of the husband from dying to being one who ran off. I feel that has a stronger reasoning for why the mom is a bit cautious on approaching a new relationship and having some trust issues with our mc. Also for future plot points on whether the husband would return and her having to pick between him and the mc. I feel that gives a more compelling narrative than him just being dead and her having some lingering loyalty to him. Yeah it's a Ok plot point and all but I feel it doesn't really give our mc any big obstacle to overcome, unlike if the husband was a bum then it would make sense since this manga is trying to show how the mc is trying to mature in order to prove his love for the mother and that he is worthy to take care of her and her son.