Not many obvious errors, just weird english stuff (when listing groups of people it is "person A, person B, and I", never "me, person A, and person B" or "person A, person B, and me") and some formatting issues. Pretty good overall!
Okay so Liese (Lise?) is officially the best character now. Also I’m really not seeing what the author’s overall direction for this is. This is just such a turn from the last chapter reunion and I really don’t see how we can keep this up or get anything substantial if its just a pushy character forcing the two of them who don’t want to be together together. I especially don’t see how we can wade through this and get to the vulnerable stuff (like “I’m dying in 6 months”). I guess I could check out the LN to see if its just the manga being a poor adaptation or if the author had a pretty bad initial flow (eventually check out I mean)
Nice intro author. I bet this will become more and more depressing and well, i can guess what is going on with the Mc and FMC, typical slow but surely depressing story. But i hope i'm wrong, yep i hope 🥺