Koibito Tutorial - Oneshot

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Damn...

The good ones are one shots...

need a good one with a short haired FMC
 
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Hate to be a killjoy, but what kind of sprained ankle takes so long to heal? Maybe she tore a tendon I guess, idk, which I don't think she would've known at the time, so I find it odd to use it as a time limit like a terminal illness from a movie.
Also why did he say that thing about her tennis career? What does her having a boyfriend have to do with tennis? It's not like she's an idol or something.

Otherwise this is real nice, fluffy feelings inside.
If she kept faking the injury, she couldn't play in the tournament. But yeah rules 2 and 3 just go to show these two are idiots, so that did kinda ruin it a bit for me.
 
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Really nice.

Now one of them just needs to get amnesia and we can do the whole thing again with an extended version.

The art is a nice style. Very "learn to draw", but not being too busy went really well with the fast pace. The reader is inspired to flesh out the story more.
 

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