Kon'yakusha ni Kirawareteiru You na node Hanaretemitara, Nazeka Kougi Saremashita - Vol. 1 Ch. 3

[Reisen]

The thinking about wanting to protect her was good, but it got too distorted to the point it was hurting her, and to begin with, why were you an asshole with her? Couldn't you explain to her properly the situation at first? Was there any need to hid this from her?

 

[TenThousandWaspsInACoat]

So he was a moron and deluded rather than genuinely evil.

 

[NeverAnother]

Me gettting into a “Stupidest Fucking Plan Ever” competition and my opponent is this idiot:
GAAAAASP

 

[GambierBay]

Cry me a river Mr former fiancee. You were w sea of red flags and god only knows how you would have treated her after marriage

 

[Suisuigo]

treat fiancee like shit for the longest time
fiancee had enough and dont want to deal with his shit anymore
fiancee looks happier with another man

surprised pikachu "How could this happened?"

Is this imbecile for real right now

 

[danny597]

Nice try trying to get me to sympathize with this moron character, but no dice

 

[Drake68655]

"I'm going to protect her from any men that might try to steal her from me by completely destroying her sense of self worth."
Yeah no, you're a shithead.

 

[SheerANONYMOUS]

Oh boo freakin’ hoo.

 

[Nico_777_]

Did page 8 really say "half-sister"? I know the same word is used for stepsister and sister-in-law, and it depends on context for the correct meaning. Because that would mean the father was having an extramarital affair since at least just after Clarissa was born (since Chelsea is a year younger).

Yes it actually says 異母妹 which specifically means a sister with a different mother (so half-sister). So I kept it as half-sister.

 

[Nico_777_]

Not going to lie. Characters like this Flory guy I feel is kind of lazy, writing wise. There's been other stories like this where the Fiance is abusive/cruel. But generally because they believe in the so called rumors and lies people make of the MC due to their own stupidity. So at least this is somewhat different.

I second this

 

[name_go_here]

People use the "two braincells fighting for third" to describe stupidity; this is one brain cell fighting against itself for last.

 

[lesseffective]

Yes it actually says 異母妹 which specifically means a sister with a different mother (so half-sister). So I kept it as half-sister.

It's clearly shown how horrible the farther is, but I was at the very least hopeful that he wasn't the kind of person to have an entire second family on the wing. I suppose he just sees it entirely as a matter of course simply because of his title...

 

[Laxtir]

The brain with no weigth, is soo that head soo empty.

 

[karmakarne]

and the irony for this is he did it to protect her from her father and later he plan to save her from him and later apologies and maybe cut anything relationship with them doing so curtail the fathers ambition to used his Noble peerage of Duke. and now she's engage with the crown prince making the fathers influence more powerful. so yeah the winner here is the bastard father of hers..

 

[looc64]

Not going to lie. Characters like this Flory guy I feel is kind of lazy, writing wise. There's been other stories like this where the Fiance is abusive/cruel. But generally because they believe in the so called rumors and lies people make of the MC due to their own stupidity. So at least this is somewhat different.

Feel like the problem is this chapter needed more angst and romantic rivals.

Like it feels weird because him treating her like shit is presented as a plan that he calmly came up with and enacted.

Personally I'd replace page 7-10 where he tells us that MC's family wants to switch the engagement, comes up with a plan to tell her her eyes are ugly, and calmly does so at a tea party with something like:

Scene: Some random social gathering, MC and he are both there

1. He overhears some people talking about how MC's family wants to switch the engagement AND speculating on who might engaged to MC instead
2. He goes to find MC and sees one of the dudes the gossipers mentioned. Maybe just on the way, maybe looking at her from a distance, maybe even currently talking to MC.
3. Regardless MC looks super pretty when he finds her.
3. He pulls MC aside and tells her to hide her eyes because they're ugly.

And then the rest of the chapter is scenes of him being increasingly mean to MC because he's jealous and controlling plus clearly unreliable narration where he tries to retroactively frame that as him protecting MC.

 

[riflow]

Perfect way to never ever stay with the girl you crushed on, my goodness.

 

[SchnappiSkello]

Asspulling: The Chapter

 

[Darkshade13]

"You look miserable. So clearly the best path is to make you more miserable for seemingly no reason, then act shocked when you hate me for it." coupled with "I allegedly don't believe the lies I'm telling her about how awful she is, but I also just randomly get angry with her and believe that nobody could love her because she's awful even if I keep saying that's a lie."

This is beyond dumb. For the character and the author.

For the character it makes it clear that he is not only stupid to the point of being clinically brain-dead, but that he's also blind, unaware, arrogant and hypocritical. It would've been better if they had just made him an arrogant prick who belittled her so that she wouldn't outshine him. Cliched and annoying, yes. But at least it makes him a real person even if it's an unrepentantly awful one. This just makes it seem like he needs someone following him around to wipe the drool off his chin and causes you to question how he hasn't had some random other person rob him for all he's worth and leave him lying in a ditch.

And for the author this demonstrates that they have no idea what they're doing. This chapters shows that we're not supposed to think of him as a terrible villain because however misguided and wrong-headed his plan was motivated out of goodness. But we can't think of him as a misunderstood hero because he still is responsible for basically all the MC's neuroses and image/confidence issues, which is terrible. So now they've taken away a primary villain (likely just leaving things to the stepmother and stepsister, who will probably get annoyed and jealous that Clarissa has moved up in the world instead of the stepsister.) to no real effect or reason.

This feels like a story where the author wanted to just write another trite, repetitive "bawww everyone in the world hates me even though I'm secretly the best person ever" escapist slop fantasy, but put no effort into actually trying to elevate the material above its cliched origins.

 

[TNT261]

Well this was dumb. I don't even know where to start. On a basic level you don't "protect" someone by negging them (though I guess they wouldn't know that term without alpha males on YouTube... Lucky them) or constantly gaslighting them. He noticed her family neglecting her and his big brain 🤓 move was to... do the same? It's sad because his family seemed to care more for the MC and her wellbeing than her own family. That sucks. This would've been a short story happily ever after if the fiancé was such a complete buffoon and an emotionally abusive one at that. How hard is it to tell her, "Yeah your dad and new stepmom and sister are kinda awful. Here's what will do to secure your position and ensure you succeed your mother." I feel like you can't even justify it with "love" at this point. No one who loves someone would go with the first idea that popped in their head especially not if that first idea was to emotionally and physically abuse them. There's not even a real excuse here. Generational trauma? Parents that told him to treat her like crap? Nope. Genuinely where did the ideas to be awful to her and hide her away even come from? Who taught him that? Who taught him that protection meant closing her off like a caged bird? Is he just psychotic? It's not like HIS mom died. Jeesus.