Kuina: Rise of the All-Girl Harem - Vol. 1 Ch. 3 - Fire And Temptation

[MangaDex]

 

[koriyop6]

I see the style changed, overall I liked this one

 

[yurilover45]

8/10

 

[Tomihilfigerk]

Kylie killing me, haha, als,o this style is weaker than the previous; you should stay with chapter 1-2 style

 

[coldwarrior12]

I see the style changed, overall I liked this one

Thank you

 

[coldwarrior12]

Kylie killing me, haha, als,o this style is weaker than the previous; you should stay with chapter 1-2 style

Thanks for the feedback haha

 

[GreenDude1]

You seriously need to work on your storyboarding. This feels like someone adapted their shitty fanfic that they wrote when they were 14. It really feels like stuff is just getting thrown at a wall.

 

[Ichigo69]

@coldwarrior12
Did you just need longer to work on this chapter or something? I feel like the artwork was a rough draft compared with the previous 2 chapters. Unlike the comment above, I didn't mind the story this chapter, but please go back to the art style in the 1st 2 chapters...

 

[coldwarrior12]

@coldwarrior12
Did you just need longer to work on this chapter or something? I feel like the artwork was a rough draft compared with the previous 2 chapters. Unlike the comment above, I didn't mind the story this chapter, but please go back to the art style in the 1st 2 chapters...

Ok got it, thx

 

[ZRAIARZ]

As someone said please get a good story board before you start doing the panels. It will do wonders. It feels also like for a few shots you tried to get more creative but also impatient which showed in the art. Also the story is still missing its actual plot. I don't think this feels like a rough draft compared to the first 2 like someone said, because some parts do feel more creative. But I do feel like the chapters you have so far all feel like a rough draft for an idea. Like this is something someone would use to further refine and do significantly better the second time