No s after "want" when using the first person singular or plural (unless you're Gollum). Check the tense you're using, it's weird sometimes. Reminder that a party includes more than one person, so please consider it as plural when discussing its "members". Same deal when discussing a group of orcs. Reminder that " -'re" is short for "are" so don't use it so freely after "you". Page 15 first panel on the right, you could've cut the "there are" when she mentions the possibility of a stronger monster appearing and it would've been just fine.
Like other people complained about, you should review your grammar. But the rest of the work seems good. We can still roughly understand.