Lily of the Valley - Ch. 7

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For anyone familiar with ntr hentai, this outcome was entirely predictable.

I suspect the series is nearing its end, with Lily remaining as Rose's sex slave forever, while Anna is left heartbroken and tries to move on, deeply devastated.

I guess the people who thought this was some sort of toxic love triangle must feel silly.
 
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I'm waiting for Rose to force herself on Anna and that to make Lily realize none of this has been love just manipulation and pain. I'm betting Lily will then force Anna after having the realization and be just like Rose. Poor Anna who was forced to just deal with this all.
 
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I'm waiting for Rose to force herself on Anna and that to make Lily realize none of this has been love just manipulation and pain. I'm betting Lily will then force Anna after having the realization and be just like Rose. Poor Anna who was forced to just deal with this all.
I doubt that. The author wrote on twitter that this will be a short story. Lily being the sex slave of Rose for life is what I think will happen. Pretty common ending in this type of hentai. Almost a trope.

https://x.com/rangrarii/status/1682633253822566401?s=46&t=6H2N8v_LkFjXBCbegAkU_Q
 
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Lily's decent in to debauchery felt a bit too quick to leave much of an impact but I guess that's what happens with short series. I think it does do a good job with Anna's pain. Anna and Lily are totally useless lesbians. They're both stupid af. Sex is hot though lol.
 
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The most damning thing about this series is that it's not even good at what it's trying to be.

Normally I'd at least bristle at events like these but the pacing, characterization and events are so all over the place and predictable that I stop thinking about what I'm reading midway through a chapter.

I read a chapter and feel nothing.

There's little to care about and such little substance here. I've genuinely read hentai more impactful than this and I'm not saying that to be hyperbolic. It's really surprising. At least the art is good.
 
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Even with my extremely low expectations for this story, it still fell short. I'm not surprised. It seems Rangrarii either doesn't care enough to make an effort or lacks the talent to do so. Personally, I think it's more a lack of ability.

The story is rushed, shallow, bare-bones, boring, and just fails at everything. I doubt most people would feel any emotional attachment to the characters due to her awkward way of presenting and writing the plot. It seems like she might do her own editing because several scenes were in the wrong order to have any emotional impact.

The erotic scenes aren't particularly interesting either. They're all about domination and power, typical for both NTR and Rangrarii's style, but no one seems to be enjoying themselves. It's so lifeless. I was almost yawning while reading it. Unless you have a specific fetish, I don't think it's interesting for most people—though, of course, young boys might like anything.

And the writing is really embarrassing. If you think it's bad in English, you should try reading it in Korean. It's like a high school boy tried to write something very edgy.

I tried to find discussions about it in Korean and couldn't find much, but what I did find was mostly negative. The Korean market is so full of pornographic stories that a story really has to stand out to be a hit. And this one has nothing going for it. Unlike what many readers here might think, the art is pretty standard for such stories in Korea. I do not predict that this author will have a promising future in the business.
 
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The fuck is this? Give me Anna then if Lily doesn't like her anymore. :shamihuh:
I do feel bad for Anna. But Lily is portrayed as even more driven by lust and less intelligent than the most extreme hentai characters. Anna can definitely do better—anyone else would be an improvement.

I also wonder if the author actually intended for readers to root for Lily and Anna to end up together? A lot of straight NTR stories from Korea at least try to get you rooting for the couples. But here, it seems like the author wasn't even trying. Lily can be summarized in one word: horny.
 
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Even with my extremely low expectations for this story, it still fell short. I'm not surprised. It seems Rangrarii either doesn't care enough to make an effort or lacks the talent to do so. Personally, I think it's more a lack of ability.

The story is rushed, shallow, bare-bones, boring, and just fails at everything. I doubt most people would feel any emotional attachment to the characters due to her awkward way of presenting and writing the plot. It seems like she might do her own editing because several scenes were in the wrong order to have any emotional impact.

The erotic scenes aren't particularly interesting either. They're all about domination and power, typical for both NTR and Rangrarii's style, but no one seems to be enjoying themselves. It's so lifeless. I was almost yawning while reading it. Unless you have a specific fetish, I don't think it's interesting for most people—though, of course, young boys might like anything.

And the writing is really embarrassing. If you think it's bad in English, you should try reading it in Korean. It's like a high school boy tried to write something very edgy.

I tried to find discussions about it in Korean and couldn't find much, but what I did find was mostly negative. The Korean market is so full of pornographic stories that a story really has to stand out to be a hit. And this one has nothing going for it. Unlike what many readers here might think, the art is pretty standard for such stories in Korea. I do not predict that this author will have a promising future in the business.
You're right about the art but I had to give them something. Agreed on everything else. This is one of those situations where an artist underestimates what writing takes. Writing is a very demanding skill and often gets taken for granted.

It feels like they collected a list of stock tropes and pasted them together but they aren't even doing that well. They are showcasing a superficial understanding of why those tropes worked in the first place and the necessary foundations that need to underpin them.

I'm being harsher than I should. Normally I would move on from stuff like this. It's just I heard they had negative things to say about the previous series with a different writer and then they've made something much worse on their own. If this is how they wanted to "improve" Bad Thinking Diary, I'm thrilled they only did the art. It seems clear to me what they would have done with that series if they had the chance, considering both stories' situations aren't entirely dissimilar (just exchange red hair with pink).
 
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You're right about the art but I had to give them something. Agreed on everything else. This is one of those situations where an artist underestimates what writing takes. Writing is a very demanding skill and often gets taken for granted.

It feels like they collected a list of stock tropes and pasted them together but they aren't even doing that well. They are showcasing a superficial understanding of why those tropes worked in the first place and the necessary foundations that need to underpin them.

I'm being harsher than I should. Normally I would move on from stuff like this. It's just I heard they had negative things to say about the previous series with a different writer and then they've made something much worse on their own. If this is how they wanted to "improve" Bad Thinking Diary, I'm thrilled they only did the art. It seems clear to me what they would have done with that series if they had the chance, considering both stories' situations aren't entirely dissimilar (just exchange red hair with pink).

You're quite right in your assumptions. She wanted to add a cheating plot to "Bad Thinking Diary" because she thought it would be "hot". I don't think Rangrarii understands her audience at all.

I honestly believe she created this story thinking it was super hot and sexy because that's what she likes. However, I'm not sure it was a wise decision. She attracted a lot of "Bad Thinking Diary" readers to her new work, and many of them had no idea what they were getting into and seem quite shocked and disappointed by what they found.
 
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I do feel bad for Anna. But Lily is portrayed as even more driven by lust and less intelligent than the most extreme hentai characters. Anna can definitely do better—anyone else would be an improvement.

I also wonder if the author actually intended for readers to root for Lily and Anna to end up together? A lot of straight NTR stories from Korea at least try to get you rooting for the couples. But here, it seems like the author wasn't even trying. Lily can be summarized in one word: horny.
My gut feeling tells me that she genuinely intended for the story to have a viable love triangle and thought that people would be engaged with Lily and Anna's storyline. However, I have never seen a story handle it worse in my life.
 
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You're quite right in your assumptions. She wanted to add a cheating plot to "Bad Thinking Diary" because she thought it would be "hot". I don't think Rangrarii understands her audience at all.

I honestly believe she created this story thinking it was super hot and sexy because that's what she likes. However, I'm not sure it was a wise decision. She attracted a lot of "Bad Thinking Diary" readers to her new work, and many of them had no idea what they were getting into and seem quite shocked and disappointed by what they found.
Yes, thanks for this. Just from reading this story and hearing her issues with Bad Thinking Diary, I thought I had an idea of what plot she wanted. That would have ruined that series for me. Funnily enough if the previous writer had written that plot it might have at least been passable. It isn't just the ideas that are undesirable it's the writing skill or lack thereof. But anyway, I've said enough about this series. Thanks for responding.
 

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