Pretty good translations. I don't know why you guys don't smooth out the grammar, but perhaps from years of translating you learn to ignore it, just like you sometimes do with years of manga reading.
You should try Wattpad for ultimate cringe, for me oku-san is somewhat acceptable cuz it's pretty subtle. Wattpad ppl be using "hai!" And "UwU" shits unbearable 💀
Ahhhh the cliché "Let's bully the weak guy" routine. If they spent less time yapping their noise holes, the might be strong enough to back up all the shit coming out their mouth.