That and all the "investigate this evidence to prove you are the culprit".reads a bit weirdly, like when she says ''I don't have the manners of a criminal'' shouldn't that be something like ''I have no need for manners towards a criminal'?
yeah they're 95% there which is enough.reads a bit weirdly, like when she says ''I don't have the manners of a criminal'' shouldn't that be something like ''I have no need for manners towards a criminal'? But other than that and a few typos it seems to be a fine first effort, esp w how inconsistent AniGli's releases tend to be
Isn't it kinda stupid to just approach the situation like that? Curious to see what's happening next
Go on, do show us how this chapter could be done in 3-4 pages. Just a rough sketch would do.Huh, this whole chapter could have been like, 3-4 pages. Instead they wasted half the chapter on "nuh-uhhh! You're the bad one!" "Nuh-uhhh you have no proof!"
It should be closer to "I have no manners for a criminal" - or better yet, "I have no reason to show such courtesy to a criminal".reads a bit weirdly, like when she says ''I don't have the manners of a criminal'' shouldn't that be something like ''I have no need for manners towards a criminal'? But other than that and a few typos it seems to be a fine first effort, esp w how inconsistent AniGli's releases tend to be
Isn't it kinda stupid to just approach the situation like that? Curious to see what's happening next