Ore no Ichizu o Jama Suru Aitsu - Ch. 4 - Time For Scents

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We're 4 chapters in and I gotta say, I think the one shot version of her is way better. Being a child with her first crush, she may look confident but she needs more signs of faltering. This is what I think the oneshot did far better. It heightens the tension and makes it feel more believable. LIke the struggle between the two of them isn't totally one-sided from the reader's perspective. Considering she basically wins every chapter anyways, the wins feel more satisfying after watching a hard fought battle (or the appearance of one).

Another thing I don't like, going from the oneshot to the manga: the children look too clean and the teacher looks less clean.

The brat comes off a bit closer to a himedere, and the boy comes off a bit closer to pampered. Their rougher appearances in the one shot sold the idea of their amateur-ness and made them feel like underdogs—makes you wanna cheer harder for their lofty attempts.

As for the teacher: making her less clean devalues the "trophy" or "model-prize" prop-characterization that both children climb towards.
 
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Another thing I don't like, going from the oneshot to the manga: the children look too clean and the teacher looks less clean.

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As for the teacher: making her less clean devalues the "trophy" or "model-prize" prop-characterization that both children climb towards.
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The art on this manga is superb. Also, this girl is like the last boss who's already won, but is just toying with the hero because she find it fun.

That teacher's too much of an age gap anyways, this kid just doesn't understand yet. Ironically, real maturity would be to admit that the girl next to him is more ideal AND realistic than someone too old for him.
 
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welp the comments are full of damn pedos. Gotta stop reading this manga's comments damn it
There is barely anything here though, it's literally people supporting the mesugaki and wanting her to get together with the boy.
If you were talking about the oneshot or first chapter i'd agree
 
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Holy fucking shit. lowkey though is it just me or the girl is actually pretty smart with her words and actions lol
It's an adult talk but using barely clothed 12 year old's to sell. I knew the artist has resemblance to fakku translated works.
 

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