Dex-chan lover
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- Jul 29, 2020
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I feel the idea is cute and funny enough, but the progression...
What the fuck was the king doing there? What was the meeting for? Why is nobody asking questions?
And the random villager?
"I came to learn about this place"
"Come with me"
Come on, just invest in an extra panel, try to make her go home a few more times.
The pacing's just...
What the fuck was the king doing there? What was the meeting for? Why is nobody asking questions?
And the random villager?
"I came to learn about this place"
"Come with me"
Come on, just invest in an extra panel, try to make her go home a few more times.
The pacing's just...