I only looked at the first page but it it has worse typesetting, a worse translation, and the first page is missing an entire line. Not to mention this has already been translated by a competent group. Just... why?
In plain human language, please GTFO and don't go any further, this series is being translated, by another group. You guys ruined manga releases by only making 12 pages, when the group prior translate that manga did 36 pages.