I can't read this anymore wtf it's like the artist can't draw expressions. The mood doesn't really match most of the time, the dialogues are awful, it's like this every time: Dialogue -> Picture -> Dialogue, it's like there's a long pause every time someone is talking. Use a reference when drawing for goodness' sake. I still have more to say but English isn't my main language so I don't really know how to express it, just like how the artist can't draw expressions, Ha!
I would have ordered the artist to read the promo 500 times, trace and draw every single frame and maybe they'll understand how and why it's better than theirs in every aspect and be motivated to improve themselves.
Sorry