@LO_ORE
I actually just recently started helping someone else as they just started out as well.
I suggest getting a good proofreader.
Also you should claim your group.
The biggest issue, other than the one I pointed out, is your typesetting. Which I can't help you much on that. I know people who know it, but you'd be best listening to others with more experience than I, in order to fix it.
"soap was almost over"
Soap does not "over".
"Crap... I forgot that I'm almost out of soap..."
There's other issues, but I don't have the time to spend to point them all out. The other issues are less egregious and more pedantic. Please continue to work hard on improving yourself, as I would hate to see this series marred by subpar quality.
Should you ever have any questions, or need any help, feel free to contact me. Message me on discord for a more rapid response. My discord server is on my group page, SlowAF, from there you can find my discord, should you choose that option.
Also, don't forget that you can upload a new version with fixes, by clicking the pencil icon next to the chapter, and reuploading the new zip.