Tensei Akujo no Kuro Rekishi - Vol. 1 Ch. 1 - Death Flag 1

[mishika10600]

@Dany1234 you're so right. Nobody think Konoha is shameless for stealing her sister's fiance... I can understand why Iana takes actions. I hate so much theses caracters so-called perfect

 

[Harperbows]

Oh god my mom found my fanfic

Truck kun: ill save you 😗

 

[Suika_Aime]

Thanks for the update, you guys are amazing

 

[Roadrunner9000]

the reasoning is being dragged around by the short hairs in this one...
the whole setting has logic problems
i know its symbolic and a fun trope but having a charackter in a story read a book of his own story in which he resembles the charackter that read the book if his own story in which there is a charackter......
thats not just a loop thats a sign iana was already diverging from the plot before she got possessed by her creator
next having the ml arrange for the blood sister of his love to be assassinated... thats gonna put a cramp in the wedding vows and his releationship with konoha seems to have more plotarmor than he himself
the assassin that somehow forgets his task because the target is not as bad as imagined
or how he fails to catch up to her during the chase toward the uncle when he had to assume she was trying to ruin the wedding

 

[looc64]

All else aside, a villainess replacing the heroine's horse with a cow is god tier shenanigans.

 

[looc64]

Mmmm, look, I like the story, I appreciate that her acting of saving her sister is the act of saving herself and her dreams, wishes, and fantasies, but I also think that she's still super delusional and her brains are no working properly. I really need her to mature and stop judging people in the same way she though when she was a teenager (her sister is plain good, the ML is supposed to be pure but to me he's just the typical idiot of "I'm just good to the woman I love", I mean, he can't be pure if he was scheming to kill her.. I do see a bit of improvement but her thoughts are too basic and convenient. Edit: I do hope she'll be able to let go of her fantasy a bit.

To my mind assuming that this world works like the real world would be just as much of a mistake as assuming it works like her teenage fantasies.

Probably best to start by checking stuff you know was absent or wrong in the original story. Like if you check an atlas is there a real world level of diversity or is it just like, 4-5 countries that share the same 1-3 languages.