The Untold Story of a High School Debut - Oneshot

[Flashplayer0CD]

im surprised he didnt fuckin body her right there lol

 

[Foxkun]

Aww cute.

 

[teruhashiclone]

WHY IS THIS NOT A WHOLE SERIES THERE'S SO MUCH POTENTIAL

 

[Grumpyfelo]

this has so big yandere potential

 

[IrregularPerson]

F***, this isn't how you express love
+1

 

[darekpawlo]

Pretty cool

 

[Shamz]

wow... is this another form of tsundere?

 

[slypy]

jesus christ this needs to be a series, so much potential

 

[TRShottie]

"oh this is pretty interesting, i can't wait for the nex- "

(ONESHOT)

"FFFFFFFFNOOOOOOOOOOOOOHOHOOOO"

 

[pockettrash]

Girl no

 

[henman]

@Walter_vi_Britannia sorry, but still no
@FredFriendly don't associate with me. I'm not that agressive nor salty. And I don't vote, because those who should vote are the people who're into this kind of things. You're just sullying the score.
@justforthelulz haha, good one) Thanks as usual!

 

[Pokari]

Unfortunately, by going exactly as far as it does, and stopping, all I get from this is, "Wow, she's a clueless asshole."

Like, I've read stuff with this sort of premise that was at least okay. This could maybe hypothetically work as a romance in a longer format if general plot arc curved towards mutual understanding. Or some such?

Or, if going for humour instead of romance: If it went further with her obliviousness and accidental-self-destruction to the point of becoming a self-aware dumpster fire, that could work. As it is these tired old tropes just feel like setting-pieces.

But anyway. I dunno, I thought the idea of these 4-page twitter mangas (when they're not a throwaway joke) was to introduce a compelling or novel premise? This doesn't seem to pass muster, alas.

 

[BrunoVilla]

@Pokari I kinda "normal" make a romance story that starts with one of the main couple being an "asshole". In the movie 10 Things I Hate About You, Heath Ledger starts to make a move on the MC because Joseph Gordon Levitt paid him (because Joseph wants to date MC's sister). In She's All That, Freddie Prinze Jr. make a bet with Paul Walker that he can make any girl the "Prom Queen" and Paul Walker choses MC. In Cruel Intentions, Sarah Michelle Gellar challenges Ryan Phillipe to make Reese Whiterspoon fall in love with him.

All these three movies have a worse "dick move" than this oneshot.

 

[Ruwan]

Ok, when is the serialization >:c

 

[bahamutmybitch]

man, all these one-shots with potential being just...one-shots...irks me. A lot.

 

[poopy420]

Plot twist he realizes he has a yandere fetish