Tonari no Kuderella wo Amayakashitara, Uchi no Aikagi wo Watasu Koto ni Natta - Vol. 7 Ch. 33 - Ch 33

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[Black12345]

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[1Seirei1]

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[soulhunterz]

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[Juston]

“Then the earth gets hit by a meteor going off course and everyone dies and the story ends😁” imagine😭😭

 

[gladius212]

hell yeah, put those beds back together!

 

[erellisae]

Man, okay, the first time it was whatever because the other group hadn't posted in months but this is literally same day c'mon man. I know you want the sweet sweet mangadex comments but this has more clear errors than your last chapter which is a bit sad to see esp. with the speedscan

3.1 - You got the wrong font? This isn't Yui talking, it's Naomi calling her, so you'd presumably not want to use her sketchy font but the normal font (as per the next panel.)
4.4 - 'I hope you'll a wonderful night' -> '... you'll have a...'
6.1 - 'Sorry of course it is yeah' -> punctuation? no clue who is saying this
6.1 cont - 'it might be nuisance' -> 'it might be a nuisance'
8.3 - 'as normal. everything would be fine if I were to act normal' -> very wonky english. 'As normal... everything'll be fine if I act normal' is better but too stiff. No kid is going to say 'as normal'. 'Just take it easy / play it cool' / any idiom of choice would work better here
8.5 - 'lighting' on its own is a bit weird. It's not wrong, but it also hasn't been mentioned up til now, whereas the garden trail has. I'd probably refer back to that.
10.2 - 'with my classmate next door' -> feels very literal and too short in english. 'with a classmate who lives next door' is a bit too long. hmm. 'with my classmate neighbour' maybe.
11.1 - 'thoset'. Also it's a bit of a run on sentence. The context is that they're tracking back through the events that led them here, so 'we only went [to the fireworks show] because Kei gave me those tickets.' gets the point across imo
11.3 - 'all those kindness are linked' -> bad grammar. 'all those moments of kindness are linked...'
16.2 - 'first for me too' -> super literal translation with no context in it. 'it's my first time seeing one too'
18 - I feel like this page has lost a lot of impact in the translation, especially because each panel says the same thing. He's not just saying 'it's not a coincidence' he's getting ready to look real mad and refute it. Some amount of characterization / localization here would help. I don't know what nuance was in the japanese but I suspect he's supposed to be saying 'we shouldn't just dismiss it as coincidence' or something like that.
20.1 - 'This is the path, which is lead by our choices' -> ? you don't lead a path, paths lead somewhere. But I think given that Naomi is talking very specifically about their choices, it would be better to use 'This is a path we've built with our own choices'
20.2 - 'I fell in love with Yui by my own choice' -> when it comes to a specific choice it's better to use 'of my own choice' rather than 'by my own choice' (english sucks) but also I think both forms are pretty antiquated. I think you could underline the last few pages by having something like 'so loving yui is one of those choices too' or something like that. Also chalk up Naomi's fourth time saying the same line
21.3 - 'giving me a choice moving to japan' -> 'giving me the chance to move to japan' feels better imo.
22 - This is exactly what I meant for 18 and 20.1. Rewords like this can change the impact and prevent repetition and this page is a good choice imo
27.1 - lmao wait they turned 180 degrees

This took me less than half an hour to do. It's not a race and another PR pass would've helped catch some of this

 

[coltflare]

Man, okay, the first time it was whatever because the other group hadn't posted in months but this is literally same day c'mon man. I know you want the sweet sweet mangadex comments but this has more clear errors than your last chapter which is a bit sad to see esp. with the speedscan

3.1 - You got the wrong font? This isn't Yui talking, it's Naomi calling her, so you'd presumably not want to use her sketchy font but the normal font (as per the next panel.)
4.4 - 'I hope you'll a wonderful night' -> '... you'll have a...'
6.1 - 'Sorry of course it is yeah' -> punctuation? no clue who is saying this
6.1 cont - 'it might be nuisance' -> 'it might be a nuisance'
8.3 - 'as normal. everything would be fine if I were to act normal' -> very wonky english. 'As normal... everything'll be fine if I act normal' is better but too stiff. No kid is going to say 'as normal'. 'Just take it easy / play it cool' / any idiom of choice would work better here
8.5 - 'lighting' on its own is a bit weird. It's not wrong, but it also hasn't been mentioned up til now, whereas the garden trail has. I'd probably refer back to that.
10.2 - 'with my classmate next door' -> feels very literal and too short in english. 'with a classmate who lives next door' is a bit too long. hmm. 'with my classmate neighbour' maybe.
11.1 - 'thoset'. Also it's a bit of a run on sentence. The context is that they're tracking back through the events that led them here, so 'we only went [to the fireworks show] because Kei gave me those tickets.' gets the point across imo
11.3 - 'all those kindness are linked' -> bad grammar. 'all those moments of kindness are linked...'
16.2 - 'first for me too' -> super literal translation with no context in it. 'it's my first time seeing one too'
18 - I feel like this page has lost a lot of impact in the translation, especially because each panel says the same thing. He's not just saying 'it's not a coincidence' he's getting ready to look real mad and refute it. Some amount of characterization / localization here would help. I don't know what nuance was in the japanese but I suspect he's supposed to be saying 'we shouldn't just dismiss it as coincidence' or something like that.
20.1 - 'This is the path, which is lead by our choices' -> ? you don't lead a path, paths lead somewhere. But I think given that Naomi is talking very specifically about their choices, it would be better to use 'This is a path we've built with our own choices'
20.2 - 'I fell in love with Yui by my own choice' -> when it comes to a specific choice it's better to use 'of my own choice' rather than 'by my own choice' (english sucks) but also I think both forms are pretty antiquated. I think you could underline the last few pages by having something like 'so loving yui is one of those choices too' or something like that. Also chalk up Naomi's fourth time saying the same line
21.3 - 'giving me a choice moving to japan' -> 'giving me the chance to move to japan' feels better imo.
22 - This is exactly what I meant for 18 and 20.1. Rewords like this can change the impact and prevent repetition and this page is a good choice imo
27.1 - lmao wait they turned 180 degrees

This took me less than half an hour to do. It's not a race and another PR pass would've helped catch some of this

the goat erellisae

 

[Black12345]

Man, okay, the first time it was whatever because the other group hadn't posted in months but this is literally same day c'mon man. I know you want the sweet sweet mangadex comments but this has more clear errors than your last chapter which is a bit sad to see esp. with the speedscan

3.1 - You got the wrong font? This isn't Yui talking, it's Naomi calling her, so you'd presumably not want to use her sketchy font but the normal font (as per the next panel.)
4.4 - 'I hope you'll a wonderful night' -> '... you'll have a...'
6.1 - 'Sorry of course it is yeah' -> punctuation? no clue who is saying this
6.1 cont - 'it might be nuisance' -> 'it might be a nuisance'
8.3 - 'as normal. everything would be fine if I were to act normal' -> very wonky english. 'As normal... everything'll be fine if I act normal' is better but too stiff. No kid is going to say 'as normal'. 'Just take it easy / play it cool' / any idiom of choice would work better here
8.5 - 'lighting' on its own is a bit weird. It's not wrong, but it also hasn't been mentioned up til now, whereas the garden trail has. I'd probably refer back to that.
10.2 - 'with my classmate next door' -> feels very literal and too short in english. 'with a classmate who lives next door' is a bit too long. hmm. 'with my classmate neighbour' maybe.
11.1 - 'thoset'. Also it's a bit of a run on sentence. The context is that they're tracking back through the events that led them here, so 'we only went [to the fireworks show] because Kei gave me those tickets.' gets the point across imo
11.3 - 'all those kindness are linked' -> bad grammar. 'all those moments of kindness are linked...'
16.2 - 'first for me too' -> super literal translation with no context in it. 'it's my first time seeing one too'
18 - I feel like this page has lost a lot of impact in the translation, especially because each panel says the same thing. He's not just saying 'it's not a coincidence' he's getting ready to look real mad and refute it. Some amount of characterization / localization here would help. I don't know what nuance was in the japanese but I suspect he's supposed to be saying 'we shouldn't just dismiss it as coincidence' or something like that.
20.1 - 'This is the path, which is lead by our choices' -> ? you don't lead a path, paths lead somewhere. But I think given that Naomi is talking very specifically about their choices, it would be better to use 'This is a path we've built with our own choices'
20.2 - 'I fell in love with Yui by my own choice' -> when it comes to a specific choice it's better to use 'of my own choice' rather than 'by my own choice' (english sucks) but also I think both forms are pretty antiquated. I think you could underline the last few pages by having something like 'so loving yui is one of those choices too' or something like that. Also chalk up Naomi's fourth time saying the same line
21.3 - 'giving me a choice moving to japan' -> 'giving me the chance to move to japan' feels better imo.
22 - This is exactly what I meant for 18 and 20.1. Rewords like this can change the impact and prevent repetition and this page is a good choice imo
27.1 - lmao wait they turned 180 degrees

This took me less than half an hour to do. It's not a race and another PR pass would've helped catch some of this

Hey there! Oh my god! Thank you so much for reading our chapter very attentively! it seems like you'd like to pr the series yourself. we are very willing to have a proofreader for this series. make sure to join up in our server

 

[Darkshade13]

Hey there! Oh my god! Thank you so much for reading our chapter very attentively! it seems like you'd like to pr the series yourself. we are very willing to have a proofreader for this series. make sure to join up in our server

 

[Lex79]

So now they won't need the second futon.

 

[pulsary]

I hate it

 

[andyarc1995]

Man, okay, the first time it was whatever because the other group hadn't posted in months but this is literally same day c'mon man. I know you want the sweet sweet mangadex comments but this has more clear errors than your last chapter which is a bit sad to see esp. with the speedscan

3.1 - You got the wrong font? This isn't Yui talking, it's Naomi calling her, so you'd presumably not want to use her sketchy font but the normal font (as per the next panel.)
4.4 - 'I hope you'll a wonderful night' -> '... you'll have a...'
6.1 - 'Sorry of course it is yeah' -> punctuation? no clue who is saying this
6.1 cont - 'it might be nuisance' -> 'it might be a nuisance'
8.3 - 'as normal. everything would be fine if I were to act normal' -> very wonky english. 'As normal... everything'll be fine if I act normal' is better but too stiff. No kid is going to say 'as normal'. 'Just take it easy / play it cool' / any idiom of choice would work better here
8.5 - 'lighting' on its own is a bit weird. It's not wrong, but it also hasn't been mentioned up til now, whereas the garden trail has. I'd probably refer back to that.
10.2 - 'with my classmate next door' -> feels very literal and too short in english. 'with a classmate who lives next door' is a bit too long. hmm. 'with my classmate neighbour' maybe.
11.1 - 'thoset'. Also it's a bit of a run on sentence. The context is that they're tracking back through the events that led them here, so 'we only went [to the fireworks show] because Kei gave me those tickets.' gets the point across imo
11.3 - 'all those kindness are linked' -> bad grammar. 'all those moments of kindness are linked...'
16.2 - 'first for me too' -> super literal translation with no context in it. 'it's my first time seeing one too'
18 - I feel like this page has lost a lot of impact in the translation, especially because each panel says the same thing. He's not just saying 'it's not a coincidence' he's getting ready to look real mad and refute it. Some amount of characterization / localization here would help. I don't know what nuance was in the japanese but I suspect he's supposed to be saying 'we shouldn't just dismiss it as coincidence' or something like that.
20.1 - 'This is the path, which is lead by our choices' -> ? you don't lead a path, paths lead somewhere. But I think given that Naomi is talking very specifically about their choices, it would be better to use 'This is a path we've built with our own choices'
20.2 - 'I fell in love with Yui by my own choice' -> when it comes to a specific choice it's better to use 'of my own choice' rather than 'by my own choice' (english sucks) but also I think both forms are pretty antiquated. I think you could underline the last few pages by having something like 'so loving yui is one of those choices too' or something like that. Also chalk up Naomi's fourth time saying the same line
21.3 - 'giving me a choice moving to japan' -> 'giving me the chance to move to japan' feels better imo.
22 - This is exactly what I meant for 18 and 20.1. Rewords like this can change the impact and prevent repetition and this page is a good choice imo
27.1 - lmao wait they turned 180 degrees

This took me less than half an hour to do. It's not a race and another PR pass would've helped catch some of this

And this laddies and gentleman is what happens when you petty snipe others after being rejected a collab because of quality issues.

Mind you, it was rejected because this same reason, PR problems. Glad to see they completely ignored any and all feedback they were given after the rejection.

What cracks me is how they want to have you on the team lmao anyway, toru will release chapter 33 soon with much better quality.

 

[Scribbooru]

Thanks, but no thanks. I'll read ToruScans instead.

 

[erellisae]

Hey there! Oh my god! Thank you so much for reading our chapter very attentively! it seems like you'd like to pr the series yourself. we are very willing to have a proofreader for this series. make sure to join up in our server

I'm flattered and all, but half the reason I dick around on forums is because I don't believe I would be a good enough PR to actually put a for-reals scan out. I'd personally expect a PR to be able to reference back to the japanese when there's uncertainty and I'm not really at a sufficiently fluent level.

Plus, you have a PR! I know I'm the one who just dumped on them with an essay and all, but I'd feel super bad just sniping a position out from underneath them!

 

[Tsukaami2]

Like a meme in French says, "That's it, Here we is"

 

[ciera]

 

[Erbakhan]

LET'S GOOOOOO

 

[B4bbel]

why are you sniping it?

 

[ITSigno]

why are you sniping it?

Because they're impatient and got offended when their PR/TL failed to meet standards. Their CLRD and TS were good enough that we were happy to continue but Blood, aka Black12345, decided to cancel the collab.