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Johnny Suggestion time!
P. 13 "want to resign?" I assume it's more of a "want to refuse?" (choosing an event for the prince; the one time thing) kind of angle, but not sure
P. 14 "When I go to the castle/ I started riding in the carriage with my father every day,.."
Sounds clunky. Not sure how to put it better.
"Once I started visiting the castle/Riding in the carriage together with my father every day,..." sounds better, but not sure about space in the bubbles.
P. 16 first bubble "was...is..." one "be" too much. Cut the "is"
Third bubble "talking" sounds better
P. 17 "the degree of freedom is both low and infinite" Sounds awkward, but I can't think of anything better atm.
P. 23 "I could hear you even in my room"
P. 24 "I am too sleepy" "You can just lay down here" "Not to sleep!" (Or something like that)
"...maybe Al had told them / but knowing even the smallest details, that can't be explained"
P. 26 "if you think you are alone and don't pay attention..."
"Everyon e", correct that
P. 28 "comm ander"