Cupid no Hatsukoi - Oneshot

[MewOne]

Ahahahahaha thank you for the sl!

 

[Lord_Ad5]

I was kinda hoping the MC was gonna look more like zoro. Think it would of fit him more but anyways

 

[LordTartaros]

Sounds fun I hope it gets serialized

 

[looc64]

A good way to somewhat subvert it is that FMC thinks that her arrows work on everyone and instantly makes the people used on it a couple, but it's revealed that the arrows only work if there is already feelings for that person.

FMC already likes MC and just doesn't realize it, and uses the arrow as an excuse as to why she likes him.

Feel like you need to figure out something like that to make a cupid protagonist story work.

If love is only the result of cupid arrows then that makes things way too unambiguous. Maybe MC and FMC already liked each other -> Nope, they didn't act like they'd been shot with arrows so they couldn't have liked each other at all.

Meanwhile if love can bloom without cupid arrows then a) what's the deal with cupids and b) at least some cupids should have noticed by now.

Basically you gotta rig things so you can still do will they won't they kinda dynamics and cupids don't look like idiots for doing their jobs.

 

[JasonBourne117]

Jimmney fucking chirstmas the women are stacked and thiccc!!!

 

[isoycrazy]

Interesting. Has potential.

 

[CharlisonX]

My only request, If this is going to be serialized, is to make this the "Chapter 1" instead of "The Whole Story". I don't want another "Ruridragon" where it's been three years already and Ruri still didn't met her dad out in the boonies.
We want to see what happens next, not "what already happened but slower".

 

[warm_panties]

Good story, but goddamn the art irritated the hell out of me. Generally well done and composed but the author's insistence on giant boobs at every angle and opportunity really depreciates the character design. Give empty space a chance to breathe, ya know?

Wing design is absolutely top notch though

Empty spaces serve only to be filled by boobs. A chance to breathe? Nay suffocate me, smother me in bosoms so big they take a third of the wole page

 

[RKADE14]

Beeg.

 

[CulR]

I really love the cover art. It's like they are shooting from a bow. You can feel the intensity of their eyes aiming down sights.

 

[BP]

Rob Liefeld-ass chest proportions.

I was wondering how to properly articulate how to describe the feeling that the Female MC's proportions were off and you nailed it. Thank you.

 

[Yotomoe]

I really hope this gets serialized. This art is really good.

 

[JagdPanther]

This was good, but didn't like how "off" the proportions were. Yako's head looked way too small for the rest of her body in many frames, even accounting for the huge melons.

 

[Sarevents]

this is why i hate oneshot, damn it