I Played the Role of the Adopted Daughter Too Well - Ch. 18

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Dad is jealous~~~

I do love how she's accidentally inciting them into being yanderes for her lol

Hopefully sword dad can be a good bonus dad for her and tundra.
 
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Hmmm... So he became a drunkard in despair over the loss of his family, and the rage of not finding the killers, BUT doesn't want to teach some kid a bit of the sword to finally get his sweet revenge?
I feel like this guy's character is a bit inconsistent.

"you're daughter was crying out for you, but you're just a loser, also dad is abusive just trust me bro" - Also Viola shoulda totally gotten slapped then, she plays the villainous role well (suitable comic title indeed).
 
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Hmmm... So he became a drunkard in despair over the loss of his family, and the rage of not finding the killers, BUT doesn't want to teach some kid a bit of the sword to finally get his sweet revenge?
I feel like this guy's character is a bit inconsistent.

"you're daughter was crying out for you, but you're just a loser, also dad is abusive just trust me bro" - Also Viola shoulda totally gotten slapped then, she plays the villainous role well (suitable comic title indeed).
As readers, we know that if he taught that kid, the kid is meant to go on to be a powerful adult that can help him with revenge. For him, he is just being asked to teach some random kid while he is stuck in depression from his grief of his family being dead. Why should he care about teaching some random kid when his family is dead? He has nothing to gain and he can barely function anyway due to his grief.
 
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I don't know if it's just me, but maybe in the future, maybe something like, "The young lady has some attractive/magnetic qualities," or something like that, instead of "She's an attractive young lady." The latter has the potential to be misread or misconstrued. (I know all you gotta do is read it within context to know he doesn't mean he's attracted to her, but if it's an easy fix, and doesn't change much of the original line, I'd probably err on the side of it not being misread.) But honestly, thanks for the for all your hard work.

Also, damn, seven quills? lmaooo
 

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