Imasara desu ga, Osananajimi wo Suki ni Natte Shimaimashita - Ch. 22 - It Happened, A Year, and a Half Ago

[24HourCinderella]

Because this is what Maruto writes. It's his bread and butter: painful love triangles, girls seeing the guy they like kissing another girl, character relationships being treated as a twist, it's his thing.

So anyone familiar with his style should have seen this coming, that is pretty funny actually.

 

[Litreara]

I feel like this could work if the flashback chapter has happened before the reveal, you can even cut it off before directly showing that they are in a relationship, only that they know each other and whatever the implications of that might be.

It shifts the context of her convos with the FMC slightly (is she supporting them because they are both intimate with her? why doesnt FMC know that they know each other ? etc) but then it would be a bigger boom when the last chapter happens.

Its like the quote from Hitchcock about a bomb in a cafe, you want to set that information in first so that it changes the context of all other information

I feel like this is the result of publishing the first draft

I think you nailed it. If readers had more concrete information, this could have been handled much better.

Also, thanks for bringing up Hitchcock's "bomb under the table." I looked into it, and it's an incredibly effective way to build a narrative.

The idea is simple: "There’s a bomb under the table, and the audience knows it, but the people at the table don’t." This creates suspense by giving the audience knowledge that the characters are unaware of. It's a great example of dramatic irony, where the audience’s knowledge makes them more engaged and anxious for the characters' safety.

 

[Georgeorat]

I don’t mean to be rude but it seems like right after you said you loved seeing people get butthurt, you proceeded to then get butthurt yourself.

Nah, I'm pointing out stupid statement.
He will probably be right, at the end of it all, but right now he is being stupid.

 

[Papyrus1910]

I feel like this could work if the flashback chapter has happened before the reveal, you can even cut it off before directly showing that they are in a relationship, only that they know each other and whatever the implications of that might be.

It shifts the context of her convos with the FMC slightly (is she supporting them because they are both intimate with her? why doesnt FMC know that they know each other ? etc) but then it would be a bigger boom when the last chapter happens.

Its like the quote from Hitchcock about a bomb in a cafe, you want to set that information in first so that it changes the context of all other information

I feel like this is the result of publishing the first draft

Yeah, this is just the absolute peak of poor execution. The last chapter made everyone hate both Yami and the story, and now they're trying to redeem her by saying oh she's just sad and misunderstood and expect us to sympathize with this? I have to admit it works well as a ragebait though - look at the sheer amount of comments. I'm still gonna read this because I'm addicted to slop.

 

[Hicleric]

The author still has a lot of work to do to pull out of this one. For better or worse, the intentional shift on tone would not have worked if he had shown more of his cards in the earlier chapters, so I'm willing to play along and see where the story progresses from here. There is certainly the potential for interesting drama here (not that I think it will be perfectly or well executed) if the author starts moving away from the established tropes.

The series may work better once compiled in a tank, since the contrast in light and dark would be known as an intended goal of the story right from the getgo.

 

[MewOne]

Wow a lotta peeps here

 

[Georgeorat]

Yeah, this is just the absolute peak of poor execution. The last chapter made everyone hate both Yami and the story, and now they're trying to redeem her by saying oh she's just sad and misunderstood and expect us to sympathize with this? I have to admit it works well as a ragebait though - look at the sheer amount of comments. I'm still gonna read this because I'm addicted to slop.

Tbf, what would work better for engagement: an outta nowhere tragic backstory(that everyone will say "wtf is this, gibme my lollipop romance, unfollow"), and then that drama, or a reverse? Now at least there are some people that want to know wtf is going on

 

[nicolas22g]

Oh boy, the rating are dropping FAST

 

[Papyrus1910]

Wow a lotta peeps here

Since the last chapter it seems this got much more attention lol

 

[Genzerum]

It's not the first time I've seen an author depict a character in a way that leaves the reader with no sympathy for them, only to reveal their backstory in the next chapter. I always wonder, isn't there a better narrative approach to this? Instead of waiting for the backstory to fix a character's lack of appeal, why not build sympathy earlier on?

Of course there is a better way. Hell, there are multiple routs, that could led to better story. But we're talking about manga artists. They are not writers. They (most of the time) don't have any decent background in writing/creating a story. Their narrative is very, very crude, almost child like (in many cases just child like), so it's only given, that they won't be able to create something deep. Or even "not shallow" at this point. Especially nowadays, where literally anyone can become "wannabe" manga artist, by posting their work on sites like pivix, from where bigger publishers will fish out titles, that have gained popularity. Not that long ago that wasn't a thing.
The moment I understood that, everything became somehow easier.

 

[Mangamoz]

Of course there is a better way. Hell, there are multiple routs, that could led to better story. But we're talking about manga artists. They are not writers. They (most of the time) don't have any decent background in writing/creating a story. Their narrative is very, very crude, almost child like (in many cases just child like), so it's only given, that they won't be able to create something deep. Or even "not shallow" at this point. Especially nowadays, where literally anyone can become "wannabe" manga artist, by posting their work on sites like pivix, from where bigger publishers will fish out titles, that have gained popularity. Not that long ago that wasn't a thing.
The moment I understood that, everything became somehow easier.

The author and artist are different people in this work.

 

[Trevoga]

what is he cooking

 

[wakawa00]

Since the last chapter it seems this got much more attention lol

All according to keikaku

 

[Litreara]

Of course there is a better way. Hell, there are multiple routs, that could led to better story. But we're talking about manga artists. They are not writers. They (most of the time) don't have any decent background in writing/creating a story. Their narrative is very, very crude, almost child like (in many cases just child like), so it's only given, that they won't be able to create something deep. Or even "not shallow" at this point. Especially nowadays, where literally anyone can become "wannabe" manga artist, by posting their work on sites like pivix, from where bigger publishers will fish out titles, that have gained popularity. Not that long ago that wasn't a thing.
The moment I understood that, everything became somehow easier.

I understand your point, and it makes perfect sense in general terms, just like my own text was generalized. However, I'm not sure it applies specifically to this manga, since Maruto is a writer and doesn't handle the artwork.

 

[SimpIeton]

Excuse me waiter, I didn't order drama in my fluff manga.

 

[RedNanaki]

God dame the author X is full of fake people and people are destroying the ratings of the manga lmao

 

[Castane]

People arguing about how reviewbombing the manga is wrong, about how the plot is not cheap. that's fine, it's genuine discussion
However seeing how 10 star ratings also went up, right in the middle of the controversy and considering at least a few old 10 stars turned into lower numbers genuinely strikes me as wrong
For all we know those are new readers that came right in the middle of a controversy and still went for a perfect 10? sounds like actual dishonest rates, 1's can be reactionary and unfair but any 10 stinks of person who loves to add more fuel into a wildfire

 

[Genzerum]

I understand your point, and it makes perfect sense in general terms, just like my own text was generalized. However, I'm not sure it applies specifically to this manga, since Maruto is a writer and doesn't handle the artwork.

Well, then it puts Fumiaki in even worse light, since he's the author of How to Raise a Boring Girlfriend, which is supposedly decent light novel, not that I've read that, I've only seen anime and it was more than okay.
Plus - just because someone can write something like LN, doesn't mean he can write decent manga. Those are 2 separate mediums, with completely different style of story building. Which we can see in this story.

 

[wakawa00]

Plus - just because someone can write something like LN, doesn't mean he can write decent manga. Those are 2 separate mediums, with completely different style of story building. Which we can see in this story.

This is being written as both novel and webcomic at the same time, Yom manages the webcomic adaptation

 

[herbderb98]

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