Kaifuku Jutsushi no Yarinaoshi - Vol. 2 Ch. 9.2

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No, that's the Captain of the Guard that protected the First Princess (now called Freya). MC used Heal (transformation) to make the Captain of the Guard look like the MC, to throw the Kingdom off the scent for a while.
 
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Does make sense though. They should've realized something is amiss much faster than this. X) Such as them not getting power-ups from his semen.

They'll probably start chasing him now, or something.
 
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@Garrett Why wouldnt it make sense? thats exactly what he showed us back when he originally escaped, he beat the shit out of the Royal Guard, changed into his form and changed him into his, then used him as bait to escape without problems.
 
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That's exactly the reason it makes no sense.
You can't create anticipation with something the reader already know.

Of course, the scene makes sense, but putting it at the end with a "IT CAN'T BE!" like that is just bad writing.
Ending the chapter with the inner monologue of the MC and putting the discovery scene before that or in the next chapter would have been a much better choice.

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@Garrett The surprise doesnt come from something we already knew, it comes from the trick being found out. Now theres the imminent threat of being followed, which sets up the next plot arc with Freyas sister.
 
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Oh I see, you thought it was a surprise.
Sorry, but I cannot condone poor storytelling like that.
 
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Man, reading the comments on this site is a pleasure.
People pay attention to grammar and spelling, even when there's a disagreement they usually stay civil, and the arguments are well put and well explained.

Like @boag said, I'm more inclined to think that last scene was there to preface the next arc, to start the kingdom pursuit.
I don't think that was meant as a surprise for us, just a starting point.
 
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I don't understand what is wrong with this kind of storytelling.

MC beat the Royal Guard. -> Disguised the Guard as himself in order to trick the Kingdom. -> The arc where Setsuna gets her revange is (practiacally) over. -> The author show us that the Kingdom has now reveled the trick, thus setting up the next arc (where it most likely will become a hunt).

What is the problem with this? This is a way to convey us readers what's coming and get us excited. A cliffhanger so to speak. So once again; what is wrong with that? A lot of stories do this; where certain information gets revealed NOT for us the readers(/watchers), but the people in the story in order to create NEW dilemma/drama FOR THEM.

One example where I believe(/hope) a "reveal" will happen and see what that will bring, is in One Piece.
Luffy and Ace was "brothers".
Luffy meet a girl that waits for Ace, he tells her he is dead.
She gets upset and claims that LUFFY who was THERE when Ace died is lying and HE doesn't understand Ace like she do.....
I want to see HOW she REACTS and what it will bring IF it gets revealed.

Or is this poor storytelling too since WE know that they were "brothers"..? F*ck the characters in the story if they know or not, the only thing that matters for a STORYTELLING is if WE the audience know, right...?
What do you even want in a story....?
 

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