the translation itself is fine, ive seen plenty of manga 'translations' that put english words together but cant form a legible sentence and this isnt one of them. i have an understanding of whats going on by reading i just find the way its presented awkward and a proofreader would fix thatProofreader? You mean a translator. This is literally worse than using DeepL or GPT-4, might as well go with those instead.