Still a comment about the translation. I sure appreciate the effort, but the quality was too low. Some parts were almost impossible for me to understand, even by guessing. And there were other parts where the guessing was obvious just by looking at the context.
I don't mind mistakes, nobody is perfect. But beyond a threshold, it ruins the fun of reading the chapter, even when your intents are the best. A relecture, ideally by someone else, would be kinda necessary.