Firstly thank you for your work!
Small errors but they add up to reduce the consumer experience.
Page 2 - tense
"my voice I can't even here a sound" the thought seems to be about the present situation
Page 3 - missing information
"...dealt the bandit..." --> "...dealt with the bandit..."
Page 4 - simplify
"Do you realize that you nearly ruined our plan to sneak inside", the inclusion of "up" is probably optional
Page 5 - consistency, missing information
You want to use "that" for emphasis or new information, but "that" is referring to the exorcism where you've already referred to it as "it".
"my regret will eventually be exorcised"
Page 6 - tense, same as on page two, spelling "revenge" but "ravange" but might be a trait of satsuki
Page 7 - simplify, tense
remove "do" in first bubble, remove "should"
"it seems she is talking with satsuki right now"
"mood maker sure is amazing"
It took me 30 minutes just to find and format this and I'm only on page 7. If you're a native english speaker finding these many errors can be irritating, imagine if there was an error in your language on every page. Just some perspective. Also english has so many rules...