The English seemed to get worse as the manga went on, and past page 30 was really bad. Seemed very ESL; you ought to find a native-speaking proofreader. It's pretty distracting with this kind of manga to have to be re-translating it in my head as I read.
Also, was this upscaled with waifu2x or something similar? There were a lot of pages with the characteristic blurry artifacts from neural net upscaling.