@KittyBlue9
Page 5, dialog in the last panel seems kinda weird. I guess second bubble is supposed to be Kazuhiro's, but it doesn't really connect with the first and the last ones.
Page 11, "I will protect you, no matter what." contradicts what happens further. Isn't he ordering her to protect
him instead, at the cost of her life?
Page 12, "To think that Shirley would manipulate even a second floor master!" Um, wasn't Shirley the second floor master?
Page 24, "this would be a trial you", missed "for".
Page 29, "I should challenge you", he's talking to Wridra, why should he challenge her? Most likely it's supposed to be "I should challenge him".