Grammar issues aside:
Pg 3: it is “Shijuuin Kako” (じゅ is Ju, or Jyu in some romanisation schemes, not “Jiyu”) and it is Tougaki (とうがき) Yuzu, not “Toukaki”.
Pg 14: “nt body” should be “my”
Pg 18: I don’t see where this clunky “12 period hour-glass” is coming from when 砂時計 is just plain hourglass.